fairytales817 Posted October 21, 2004 Report Share Posted October 21, 2004 I still feel the velvet petal in my fragile hands And I still see it on drifting away and on the wind When I let it go, putting my hope on it's flight Hoping for life to come together and mend I still feel the rain pelting on my back As I learned forward and sped away Giving it all I had left just to excape Having no where to go but knowing I couldn't stay I still feel the sun on my face As I awoke in a new room, a whole new life And no one was there, I was alone The first thing I looked for was a knife I still feel my hand slapping his face And the sting I felt buring through my eyes He stood there and looked at me But neither one of us could cry I still feel the cold that night Standing in the dark, caught in his stare Knowing life was frozen for a time And for a split second I didn't care I still feel her tears on my shoulder When all I could do was hold her tight I knew she was hurting, and I couldn't help But I was finally doing what was right I still feel it all It won't ever go away But so long as I have it At least something will stay Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
verbena Posted October 21, 2004 Report Share Posted October 21, 2004 Your inspiration is back with a vengence. That is my favorite so far. Look at each line one at a time. Each line by itself is full of power and impact. Thank you for sharing that. Wish I could let go and write that way... Ann Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fairytales817 Posted October 21, 2004 Author Report Share Posted October 21, 2004 Thank you, Ann. Glad to know that someone apprecitate it. I'm proud of it, just because, hey, I wrote again. I had two more that were good, but I wrote them in a PSAT booklet... Not getting it back. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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