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Hi all I wrote this poem quite a long time ago and I just figured maybe some of you might like to

read it? For me it's mainly about guilt and gender. :)

He

hid

his

body

while I

held

his coat.

I

noticed

the rain

splashing his

tattooed shoulders.

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*NB: KP is now quivering under table with fear, but has noted comment and may post poem when composure is recovered!

Ta xx

Mike coaxes out KP with soothing voice and her favourite chocolates... :)

..KP runs upstairs to get some poems and posts them right now!! :):) :)

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Duuuuuuuuuude!

You're good!

Have you done this before?

Okay, am off upstairs like a little hamster... Actually no, that would take too long!

Erm... Am off upstairs like a sprightly gazelle, in search of said poems!

Hoorah!

KP

xx

P.S. Bit nervous though! :huh:

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Okay Mikey, no laughing please!

I wrote this during one of my spells in hospital.

Oh, the fun!

The Matter Of Lady Grey

It is grey in here

I have noticed

Years ago I used to see grey things differently

Elephants

They were grey

Yet leathery at the same time

There is leather here

On the outside

But no dryness

Just damp and too absorbant

It is dull and soft and hard and cold

And so very grey

My carpet was grey once

I remember

My room was an explosion of colour

Over a grey carpet in a dark house

My lilac walls used to shout

At the darkness

But there are no longer lilacs here

Only nightshades

Hiding within the grey

"What's the matter?"

Because now I am the one

Who is shouting

Okay, that's it. My mother is doing an MA in poetry, so I am well aware of how lacking in form it is, etc.

But it's good to let stuff out without having to worry about poetic form! It's too restricting otherwise!

Hope you don't hate it and think I'm an idiot.

My god, how insecure am I????!!!!!!

Sorry.

Ahhh! Now the apologies have started!

Bugger!

KP

xx

*KP scurries back under table and growls quietly...

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KP, you brave little bunny! :)

What a sweet poem, have u got any more..? :)

U r more ambitious than me in terms of poem length, i don't usually venture past about 10 lines! How

about putting a full stop somewhere in the middle? I felt like I needed to park-up someplace around

there, get my breath back like? :)

Poetry is very hard isn't it, is your mum a boffin?

:):) :)

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Hello Michael!

How's the digging (avatar!) coming along? Now THERE'S a poem! "Digging" by Seamus Heaney. It's the best! Look it up if you ever get the chance!

Thanks for nice comments! I'm not a fan of punctuation, simply because I am very lazy and love freestyle! No, forget the freestyle, I'm just lazy! But I shall try to throw in the odd comma and semi-colon in my next poem just for you!

Yes, my mother is the boffin of all boffins when it comes to poetry! Especially the really complicated kind that makes NO sense to me whatsoever! She's brilliant though - it's definitely a special talent!

KP

xx

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hey KP yes i remember digging (ha ha) i like the dr kerlin's bag one he did in electric light? :)

Hi Michael,

I know, the one about the doctor who brings babies into the world?

My mother is a total Seamus Heaney NUT! And she's completely in love with Ted Hughes, which is sad because he died a few years ago. Don't you think Sylvia Plath just had to be a borderline? The whole marriage seemed to be full of problems, and she tried to kill herself when she was a teenager, before she even met him.

Anyway, tra la la!

Enough happy talk from me!

Would love to hear another one of your poems sometime!

Don't worry if they're short - I'm pretty dense when it comes to poetry, so the short ones tend to be easier for me to stay focused on! Otherwise I lose it halfway through!

Pathetic I know! I'm more of a literature freak I suppose! I'm a huge DH Lawrence fan, but that's because he was obviously an HSP (Highly Sensitive Person - read the Elain N Aron book!). He sends me into a wonderful trance!

Okay, that's enough waffling from me!

Take care,

KP

xx

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yes i like SP and TH too.. have u read elaine feinstein's biography it's great :)

I think i've heard it said that SP had bipolar i dunno :huh:

I really like Charles Bukowski too he's the man :)

..and Carol Duffy, she's the woman :)

..Thomas Hardy knocked out some kick-ass poems too :)

..etc. :)

Lots of great stuff to buy here:

http://www.inpressbooks.co.uk/default.aspx

http://www.boxofwords.com/

http://www.poetrybusiness.co.uk/

:D

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