Rael Posted April 27, 2008 Report Share Posted April 27, 2008 Jeaslous whisper fade over dark embersas the firelight dimsBleeding out into nothingSecrets dance across the moonlightInnocence shattered by the glimmering bladeTaken over by worthless chatteringsIncessant noise, black shadows fillingup the cresent moonBlinding lights stray towards meCrippling loss binds my handsTaking away what once was so strongEviscerating life, taking to holdTrading the confidence I once hadFall into darkness, nothingness, gone. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rael Posted April 28, 2008 Author Report Share Posted April 28, 2008 guess it needs more fine tuning than i thought oh wellxxxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
seafree Posted April 28, 2008 Report Share Posted April 28, 2008 I think it's beautiful. I love all the words- like glimmering, and eviscerating. Wish i had the talent to write like that.Are you feeling better now Rael?Much luv,Jess xx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pgiggle Posted April 28, 2008 Report Share Posted April 28, 2008 i love the way you use words to move emotion while reading your work Raelits really good to see your creative streak being productive like this and please keep sharing them, i know im not the worlds most prolific poster but i do read the creative corner always :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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