DaddyJay Posted May 14, 2008 Report Share Posted May 14, 2008 Ok guys this is my first ever poem I've posted on here. It's a poem I've written especially for my family and friends to try and make them understand how it is I feel about myself and what I go through. Bare in mind that it is my first, but I don't care if you think its rubbish It gives out the exact message I intended so I'm happy with it. Oh, and please do reply and tell me honestly what you think, I'd like to know before I take the huge step in actually showing this to my family. Thank you.Who Am I?Who Am I?I'm a friend, I'm a son, I'm a brother, a father to be,I'm writing this in hope that eventually you'll understand me.To understand the feelings that I live with each day,To understand that no matter how hard I try, they will not go away.I live this live as though my body is on fire,I live this life as though I'm walking a highwire.The smallest of things can cause so much pain,And how it feels when I fall down I cannot explain.With a constant fake smile to everyone outside,I fear they will shun me so I prefer to hide.Thoughts enter my mind that I dare not speak,My mind and my body become ever so weak.While inside a break, I curse and I cry,I can't tell you the truth of the reasons why.I sit here alone pushing away those I love,A love you still hold, a love I'm unworthy of.Once you said it's like walking on eggshells,You don't know how to help or who to tell.I know I make it hard for you, but I appreciate you, I do!I swear on my life I am nothing without you.Each day I look in the mirror and do you wanna know what I think?Why is here? What does he want? The stupid, ugly prick!You may think I'm confident with all the relationships I've had,Truth is, I'm scared of being alone... Yeh it's that bad!So you see this is how I feel inside,I feel worthless and more, with no ambition or pride.I know you are there for me whenever I'm in need,I hate you! Go away! I love you! Don't leave!Who Am I?I'm a friend, I'm a son, I'm a brother, a father to be,So now you've read this do you understand me?You are my family, my friends, the reason I carry on.Just know I will always love you, no matter what is said or done.-Written by Jay Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shellybelly Posted May 14, 2008 Report Share Posted May 14, 2008 daddy jaythat is absolutley fantastic and i hope maybe you can show your mum that as i think it says it alli can relate it and are you sure it your first poem?? cause that was seriously excellent i loved itand im not just been nice i really did and i think it speaks for itself and im glad you like itcause thats all that matters!! i know your son will be very proud of his daddy your a talented manhugs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Todash Posted May 15, 2008 Report Share Posted May 15, 2008 Thats great hun. Try some more. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tripper Posted May 15, 2008 Report Share Posted May 15, 2008 All I can say is wow!! Well done! :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ulrica Posted May 15, 2008 Report Share Posted May 15, 2008 It gave me goosebumps. It was like reading something I could have written. Keep it up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Paris Posted May 15, 2008 Report Share Posted May 15, 2008 Jay, i thought the poem was brillaint, really powerful :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pynn Posted May 15, 2008 Report Share Posted May 15, 2008 I can relate to this so much, to the point that it made me cry.I think i'm going to show this to my dad, maybe then he understands my pain.Thanks so much Jay! Please do more poetry...Love,Lynn Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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