Villan Posted August 28, 2009 Report Share Posted August 28, 2009 Sleep - by Chips Haunting dreams that play in my head Keep me awake when Im in my bed Try to distract to keep them away Fails to happen theyre there to stay Toss and Turn, shake and shiver Getting upset, crying a river Wheres the dream fairy to keep me secure Surely meds aint the only cure I just want to sleep, not asking a lot I try to be good, give all that Ive got To get myself well without noones aid But deep down inside Im still very afraid Well there you all go... Thanks for reading xx ed: to add the word "still" into the las line - ever the perfectionist lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
toaster Posted August 28, 2009 Report Share Posted August 28, 2009 :( (((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((chips)))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))) that made me go all cold and feel sad (from a writers perspective, that's good! You said it like it is and got your feelings across ) *+*+*+*+*+*+*+*+*+*+*+*+*+*+*+*+*+*+*+*+*+*+*+ sleepy dust (its natural), but save it for later, you still in work! Love ya xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Villan Posted August 28, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 28, 2009 Aaaaaaaaaaawwwwwwwwww Interesting you say that I got my feelings across cos i felt absolutely nothing when i wrote it. I hadn't actually seen it as sad myself - just words that came to me... Is like my t said, ima detached from my feelings - whis is also prolly why i write most of my stuff (blog and all) at work where i am unable to express these feelings - safer in my head i think... I will print it out and take it to my next t session to discuss... O and din't mean to make u feel sad And thanks for the sleepy dust... Luv ya 2 xx :ninja: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
quiteemma Posted August 28, 2009 Report Share Posted August 28, 2009 (((((((((((((((((((((((((((((((( chips))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))) very well written sweetie.. xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Roses Posted August 28, 2009 Report Share Posted August 28, 2009 I could sense your detatchment. But you have talent. Imagine, if you could move Toastie-pops to shivers and good bumps when you are detatched, imagine how powerful your words could be if you weren't. I look forward to reading more and thank you for sharing your feelings babe xxxxxxxxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
toaster Posted August 28, 2009 Report Share Posted August 28, 2009 I think its a useful skill to have, to be able to write without feeling - u can go back an find ur emotion in it later, or let the piece evoke emotion in you. Those 'words' that 'just came to you' came from somewhere :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rmorgan_uk Posted August 28, 2009 Report Share Posted August 28, 2009 very good ive ony use poetry since coming here and it really helps get the feelings out Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
piuma Posted August 28, 2009 Report Share Posted August 28, 2009 Great start hun, thanks for sharing, xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Villan Posted August 28, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 28, 2009 yayyyyyyyyyyyyy confidence to do more love u guys xxxxxxxxxxxxxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rael Posted August 28, 2009 Report Share Posted August 28, 2009 thats really good, like it. i know what you mean about detaching when you write, i do the same. i get the feelings then the words come, they are totally separate and only see or am told later what comes across and then i kinda feel it again. xxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sophhee23 Posted August 29, 2009 Report Share Posted August 29, 2009 Thats amazing i cant believe you wrote that!! its unbelievable, knew you were a little brain box too. very very good!! xx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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