Roses Posted July 17, 2010 Report Share Posted July 17, 2010 Control Kill me my love, and tell me you love me, Whisper sweet promises inside my soul. Fill me with longing, I am willing to please, I will never deny you, just show me how. Hold my heart for a while, my dear, For the pain it curshes my spirit. Let me catch my breath long enough, So I may please thee some more. Carry my body, lifeless and limp, Place me where you want me; frame my life. Dress me up, sweet angel, then pull on my strings, Orchestrate my every rhythm. Dry these tears so I might smile again, A smile is a smile reflected. Be careful to lock up my pain, my love, Wearing my costume I'll dance anyway. For all these years I'll yield to thee, Through all these trials I will lie. Ever so slightly inside your shadow, No words echo inside this cave. Rose x Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sanctuary Posted July 17, 2010 Report Share Posted July 17, 2010 You are more than a puppett on a string babe.. you have control, over yourself, and the love you give out is obvious... you don't need to control it... let is come naturally and the people that love you will be there... I promise xxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LottieLou Posted July 17, 2010 Report Share Posted July 17, 2010 thats really sad. hope u feel better soon. xxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Roses Posted July 17, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 17, 2010 Thank you Sanctuary and Lottie xxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Saharah Blue Posted July 17, 2010 Report Share Posted July 17, 2010 very well written though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Roses Posted July 17, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 17, 2010 thanks sah. xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx Even though the subject matter is disturbing for me, I do feel good about writing it down and I'm pleased with how the poem is structured. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
guntarded Posted July 17, 2010 Report Share Posted July 17, 2010 Roses, this poem made me a little sad. You know what struck me about the words....the first 4 words "kill me my love"...and then a poetic means by which someone can do it well with the control - so much so that your inside a cave and a shadow. You have an identity Roses, a powerful, strong and vivacious identity that doesn't warrant to be hid under someone's controlling costume hon. You are worth so much more and are so much better. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Roses Posted July 17, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 17, 2010 (((((((((((((((((((((gun))))))))))))))))))))))))))) It makes me very sad too. For so long I have been angry and now I am just sad. Today has been truly horrible, he has been so nice and so awkward, almost like we are strangers yet we are not. Like he is scared to be himself. What have I done? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
*Summer* Posted July 17, 2010 Report Share Posted July 17, 2010 very sad hope you are ok (((((Roses))))) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dani Posted July 17, 2010 Report Share Posted July 17, 2010 oh hun xxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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Roses Posted October 4, 2010 Author Report Share Posted October 4, 2010 BUMP Mike, can you hear me?????? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Apollo 13 Posted October 8, 2010 Report Share Posted October 8, 2010 I hope he can Txx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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