Villan Posted July 19, 2010 Report Share Posted July 19, 2010 Hear me - by Chips Disrespected and talked down to Made to feel like I am small People walk all over me It doesn’t feel real nice at all Big decisions, no one asks me Always feel like I’m left out Plan and plot without my input Makes me want to scream and shout Look at me am I not worthy Don’t you want to hear my voice All you seem to want to do Is take away my power of choice All my life I’ve been excluded Sitting out whilst life goes by Why can you not seem to see me Why cant you just hear me cry Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tink_85 Posted July 19, 2010 Report Share Posted July 19, 2010 well done chips :hug2: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dani Posted July 19, 2010 Report Share Posted July 19, 2010 great poem :-) xx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Villan Posted July 19, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 19, 2010 ty... glad u 2 liked it *hugs* xxx i started that one ages ago, but i have been bored at work today and was going through all my files on my mem stick and found a bunch of ramblings and unfinished writings so i figured i'd "waste" my time more productively than just mucking about online and finish off some of what i started... i hate being bored at work - cos i know there is loads of stuff i could be doing rather than just be stuck here with not much to do... i just hope the work picks up soon... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pink stars Posted July 19, 2010 Report Share Posted July 19, 2010 ((((chips)))) xxxxxxxxxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Roses Posted July 19, 2010 Report Share Posted July 19, 2010 I hear you hun. I'm glad you finished the poem. Has it helped? I hope it has xxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Villan Posted July 19, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 19, 2010 thanks pink & roses *hugs* yeah Roses - finishin it was empowering - like ME hearing myself - kinda goes with trying to be a lil more assertive, and respective of my own feelings and stuff... which is what i am working on atm... kinda fate that i found that unfinished work really - maybe i wasnt ready to finish it before, but now i done some more work on me, i felt more in a place to complete it... and the final lines came real easily xxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Roses Posted July 19, 2010 Report Share Posted July 19, 2010 That's a good sign that it came naturally hun. I'm so glad it helped you xxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sanctuary Posted July 19, 2010 Report Share Posted July 19, 2010 its very good chips xxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Villan Posted December 20, 2011 Author Report Share Posted December 20, 2011 BUMPED from July 2010 (sorry) WRT my status update, this is the poem i have submitted to a competition. The theme is "speak up, speak out" against hatred and discrimination... Closing date is 18th January... I know i wrote it primarily about Mental health, and the organisation running the competition is nothing to do with that, but i thought it kinda fitted that theme quite well... I dont expect to get anywhere - just proud of myself for submitting it is all !!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
toaster Posted December 20, 2011 Report Share Posted December 20, 2011 It's really good, I really like it! And yes, it is great you have been brave enough to enter a competition, I'm too much of a chicken lol. Good luck! xx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Villan Posted December 20, 2011 Author Report Share Posted December 20, 2011 thanks crumbs - glad you liked it... xxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
catsmother21 Posted December 20, 2011 Report Share Posted December 20, 2011 ((Villan)) I like it very much but so sorry that you felt like this xx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Villan Posted December 20, 2011 Author Report Share Posted December 20, 2011 awww thanks hun... i think alot of us feel like that at times... glad you like it tho xxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bibiddi Posted December 20, 2011 Report Share Posted December 20, 2011 Well done for submitting it. Its an excellent poem. I hope it does well. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Villan Posted December 20, 2011 Author Report Share Posted December 20, 2011 wow thanks bibiddi and every one else who said such kind things... i knew i could rely on all of yous for support xxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silverwolf Posted December 20, 2011 Report Share Posted December 20, 2011 Yaaaay! You go Vill! It's great that you entered a competition with it - cos you never know, someones gotta win it and if you don't enter then you never will! Love the poem by the way, i like ones that have a rhyming bit, and it's got good rhythm too. Good luck in the comp we's all rooting for you x Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Apollo 13 Posted December 22, 2011 Report Share Posted December 22, 2011 Late to the party.....most unlike me Beautiful words, beautiful persona....................and if you are at a hiatus during Crimbo............me and the G always needs walkies, and are on the South Coast, we are at your beck and call :bigarmhug[1]: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Villan Posted December 29, 2011 Author Report Share Posted December 29, 2011 thanks wolfie sometimes my poems fit rhyming and rhythm... i also prefer that stuff when i read poems tbh... although freestyle fits better some themes... depends what feels right at the time i think ! i'm not too fussed whether it wins or not, just chuffed with me for having the guts to put it out there is enough ! and lol thanks apollo although at crimbo i was actually in luxembourg so too far for walkies ! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
angelk01 Posted December 29, 2011 Report Share Posted December 29, 2011 Really great poem Chips. It's very meaningful and emotive. xxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ollieclews Posted January 1, 2012 Report Share Posted January 1, 2012 Lovely poem xx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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