walker Posted November 8, 2010 Report Share Posted November 8, 2010 BORN - created full of segments all held in their place stuck neatly tightly packed 'perfect' they said all fitting together working together being together but the heat of life begins to melt them they loosen they shift they feel wrong time moves on they twist and turn they weaken but still the wrapper holds them in keeping their 'perfect' shape hiding the distortions within as the years move more and more they melt they break no longer fitting gaps appearing the wrapper struggling to contain, to conceal then one day the 'perfect' whole is hit hard shattered the wrapper bursts open the released segments break apart spilling out in pieces damaged broken this way that way tumbling out into the light into the world for all to see they lay stunned raw confused lost longing to be together to fit together to work together but they are damaged scarred mishapen misplaced the wrapper is torn their places gone their perfection destroyed they gather in pieces this way that way failing to connect searching for security for a whole that can contain them nothing fits nothing belongs nothing holds there is no wrapper ready for them waiting to hold them in a perfect form ed. even crappier version of the crap version lost earlier Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Peregrine Posted November 8, 2010 Report Share Posted November 8, 2010 I like it, Walker! x Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wynter Grace Posted November 8, 2010 Report Share Posted November 8, 2010 I really like it Walker xx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
catsmother21 Posted November 8, 2010 Report Share Posted November 8, 2010 This is amazing and exactly what happened to me - I really admire you being able to write like this :hug2: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BimoUK Posted November 8, 2010 Report Share Posted November 8, 2010 I think it's brilliant Walker!!! XX Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
carlylight1 Posted November 8, 2010 Report Share Posted November 8, 2010 brilian poem walker. ty for sharing xxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
canadianbumble Posted November 8, 2010 Report Share Posted November 8, 2010 That is one brilliant poem Walker and so true. T,Y for sharing it with us. B xx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
snowman Posted November 8, 2010 Report Share Posted November 8, 2010 Omg I love that!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dani Posted November 8, 2010 Report Share Posted November 8, 2010 wow walker...love it xxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pink stars Posted November 8, 2010 Report Share Posted November 8, 2010 I really really love it! ty so much for sharing walker x Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
walker Posted November 8, 2010 Author Report Share Posted November 8, 2010 i am truly bowled over that people like it thankyou so so much i cant tell u i was so distraught when i lost the first version wich was better and it was such a struggle to come back and write it without all the brain torment that had sourced the first one thankyou so so so much Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silverwolf Posted November 8, 2010 Report Share Posted November 8, 2010 This is amazing Walker - I love it!! It's so descriptive and i can see it in my minds eye happening. You are very good with words mate! x Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jillv Posted November 8, 2010 Report Share Posted November 8, 2010 What an amazing analogy, Walker. The best poem I have ever read here. What sprang to mind after reading it, is that a chocolate orange is still wonderful even after it has been broken apart. xx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Christine001 Posted November 9, 2010 Report Share Posted November 9, 2010 wow walker its brilliant x Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DaisyChain Posted November 9, 2010 Report Share Posted November 9, 2010 Amazing and so true With love always x Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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