snowman Posted January 25, 2011 Report Share Posted January 25, 2011 As some of you know I am attending a course called "Writing for wellness" Today we were focussing on poems. We looked at Haiku. This is a Japanese poem with the following rules:- 3 lines long 17 syllables in total 1st and 3rd line have 5 syllables, the second line has 7 syllables. It must end on a “strong” word. These are the 2 I wrote in the session today Tell me little girl Why are you hiding away? Its safe here – come out. The book falls open The secrets are there to see But the page is blank. It would be cool if anyone else fancies a go........... :masked: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jam-parker Posted January 25, 2011 Report Share Posted January 25, 2011 Snowman The door is closed shut The lights are turned down low Time to turn them up First try. Thank you Jamie Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
snowman Posted January 25, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 25, 2011 Niiiiiiiccccceeeee!!! They are quite fun and can be done quite quickly which is good for me as I get easily distracted!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
last_time_lucky Posted January 25, 2011 Report Share Posted January 25, 2011 Ooh might have a go later when I can think! Cool idea! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jam-parker Posted January 25, 2011 Report Share Posted January 25, 2011 Niiiiiiiccccceeeee!!! They are quite fun and can be done quite quickly which is good for me as I get easily distracted!!!! Snowman Hmmm oh yes, me too. They are great fun, thank you. Edit - The tables are turned The tide is turning back in surf's up, grab your board. ???? ( I don't know really ) Jamie xx. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cloud12 Posted January 25, 2011 Report Share Posted January 25, 2011 I wud like to try this some time...but not right now cus I can't focus right Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jam-parker Posted January 26, 2011 Report Share Posted January 26, 2011 Haiku (Love that word) By magic carpet Take me to the clouds above and into the sun Jamie xx. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sanctuary Posted January 26, 2011 Report Share Posted January 26, 2011 My life is a mess But with time I will fix it Give me therapy! xx Thanks Snowman, this is really good distraction! xxxx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jam-parker Posted January 26, 2011 Report Share Posted January 26, 2011 My life is a mess But with time I will fix it Give me therapy! I really like this one sanctuary. Jamie Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
snowman Posted January 26, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 26, 2011 Hey these are good - and I agree, great distraction!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jam-parker Posted January 26, 2011 Report Share Posted January 26, 2011 Thank you snowman My negative thoughts through my shattered head they pass but they don't stay long. Jamie xx. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
UnderTheBridge Posted January 26, 2011 Report Share Posted January 26, 2011 Divine rain cascades Numbly cleansing exposed skin The puddle ripples Haiku's are a pain to write, I avoid them - coming from a poet that doesn't sound very promising. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DJJK Posted January 26, 2011 Report Share Posted January 26, 2011 Haikus are quite fun The syllables are pretty as long as you don't ruin it and put far too many in the last line... KX Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
snowman Posted January 27, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 27, 2011 Hee hee....... Might show the teacher that one next week if you don't mind.......i love when the rules get broken!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Maize Posted January 27, 2011 Report Share Posted January 27, 2011 That's cool! I love creative writing stuff. Maybe I can come up with one when I'm not so tired. :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DJJK Posted January 27, 2011 Report Share Posted January 27, 2011 Hee hee....... Might show the teacher that one next week if you don't mind.......i love when the rules get broken!!! Very welcome S...glad you liked it... Kx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jam-parker Posted January 30, 2011 Report Share Posted January 30, 2011 :) I do like haiku Mirtazipine dreams So many effects on me some I cannot see. Enjoy. Jamie xx. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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